Hi Jordyn , It is Olivia P from Yaldhurst Model School. Good job on your blog post it is good how you added something about it at the top.But I think you could do better there was only 2 sentence of writing and I think for a 9 year old oyu could do better. Next time oyu need to add more sentences and at the start oyu need to say hello so they are interested in the blog post. Good job. Bye.
Hi Jordyn , It is Olivia P from Yaldhurst Model School. Good job on your blog post it is good how you added something about it at the top.But I think you could do better there was only 2 sentence of writing and I think for a 9 year old oyu could do better. Next time oyu need to add more sentences and at the start oyu need to say hello so they are interested in the blog post.
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well it would be better if the video posted
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